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ok i think the general direction of the din dins story is starting to form, please if you have any comments or little ideas at all post them on here and ill start to form this into a working screenplay and have it ready for yous all to look at and see what yous think. i will defiantly have the first draft of it ready for all to see over the by Sunday evening.
as for concept and design, if you or anyone you know would be interested in working on developing the visual style of the piece let us know here and we will then set up a thread for the design side of the project.
as for concept and design, if you or anyone you know would be interested in working on developing the visual style of the piece let us know here and we will then set up a thread for the design side of the project.
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Hi Opentarget!
Good to see you back in action!
Before you posted, I had a quick go at describing the characters/images required for prospective character designers:-
Full animated characters
- vampire guy - young, attractive, slightly less than shoulder length hair. Fangs, some passing resemblance to his father
- pizza delivery guy - older, rounded, beard, maybe biker helmet, either hair conceals the eyes or very dark, almost black, reflective sunglasses. You cannot see his eyes and neither can vampire guy.
2d stylized Character images
- vampire guy's father (portrait)
Date girls (2d character portraits on date website "DateBite.com") In order of appearance on the website:-
- Girl 1 - Isla - blonde, pretty, girl next door, frilly white and blue dress, blue bow in hair (shepherd's crook?)
- girl 2 - Sophie - classic goth girl look, black hair, eyeliner, lipstick, looks moody
- girl 3 - Jenny - plump, rounded face, short dark hair, spots (comments about pizza topping)
- girl 4 - Isabella - missing teeth, eye patch, messy, uncontrollable brown hair, cheeky grin like she's played a prank
Also saw a film in 3dworld called "Dracula4d" - I think we need to ensure Din Dins looks quite different. Shouldn't be too hard. http://www.thejuice.com/?p=46
Looking forward to the final script.
Good to see you back in action!
Before you posted, I had a quick go at describing the characters/images required for prospective character designers:-
Full animated characters
- vampire guy - young, attractive, slightly less than shoulder length hair. Fangs, some passing resemblance to his father
- pizza delivery guy - older, rounded, beard, maybe biker helmet, either hair conceals the eyes or very dark, almost black, reflective sunglasses. You cannot see his eyes and neither can vampire guy.
2d stylized Character images
- vampire guy's father (portrait)
Date girls (2d character portraits on date website "DateBite.com") In order of appearance on the website:-
- Girl 1 - Isla - blonde, pretty, girl next door, frilly white and blue dress, blue bow in hair (shepherd's crook?)
- girl 2 - Sophie - classic goth girl look, black hair, eyeliner, lipstick, looks moody
- girl 3 - Jenny - plump, rounded face, short dark hair, spots (comments about pizza topping)
- girl 4 - Isabella - missing teeth, eye patch, messy, uncontrollable brown hair, cheeky grin like she's played a prank
Also saw a film in 3dworld called "Dracula4d" - I think we need to ensure Din Dins looks quite different. Shouldn't be too hard. http://www.thejuice.com/?p=46
Looking forward to the final script.
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Great post redmotion, working on the script right now...the bank holiday weekend here in Dublin grabbed me by the scruff and my hungover head is taking longer to produce intelligently structured words in the script than I previously would have thought. Soon a first pass.
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ok so the screenplay is almost ready to show. Im in work now so cant upload it right now, but i hope to have it to you guys by lunch time tomorrow. I put a fair amount of work into it but am not precious so will be open to fixs and changes so that we can get the best working screenplay to go with.
as for the theme, its quite adult in nature so i wounder if people have an opinion on how adult we can go with this(im not talking porn here...just blood and guts and gore and language) so id love to hear your thoughts on that.
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I have the screenplay done, problem is that i cant upload it here in work as they are strict about putting external files onto the network at all!
so I will have to wait until i am at home in my family home as i moved into a new house a few weeks ago and am not up and running online yet. ill be there on Saturday so hold fast and sorry for the delay.
as for the theme, its quite adult in nature so i wounder if people have an opinion on how adult we can go with this(im not talking porn here...just blood and guts and gore and language) so id love to hear your thoughts on that.
EDIT:
I have the screenplay done, problem is that i cant upload it here in work as they are strict about putting external files onto the network at all!
so I will have to wait until i am at home in my family home as i moved into a new house a few weeks ago and am not up and running online yet. ill be there on Saturday so hold fast and sorry for the delay.
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Er-hmm!
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haha i hear you! like i said in my last post, my work wont allow me to put any external files on the network.
so im gona pop to a net cafe on the way home tonight and upload what i have for critique.
so im gona pop to a net cafe on the way home tonight and upload what i have for critique.
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i cant upload a pdf....
anyone have any ideas?
redmotion, how did u get that script thing to work so maybe i can paste it in there?
anyone have any ideas?
redmotion, how did u get that script thing to work so maybe i can paste it in there?
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I just copy pasted the text into some code brackets and then reformatted it.
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this is draft_001 of the screenplay, i would love it if yous could overlook the bad spelling and so on
let us know what yous think and how we might push it further so we can have a great story to work with!
enjoy.
let us know what yous think and how we might push it further so we can have a great story to work with!
enjoy.
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Din Dins
By
si-community.com
EXT.PICTURESQUE TOWN-SUNSET
Sun is starting to set in around the houses and shops of a
beautiful picturesque town, the lights are coming on in the
houses and the curtains are being drawn, up on the hill
above the town a huge Gothic house sits quietly hulking
above the town.
INT.GOTHIC MANSION BEDROOM-SUNSET
A digital alarm clock sits beeping rested in the hand of a
suit of Armour, the Armour is dressed in a pair of boxer
shorts and has a baseball hat on its head.
Vamp shifts in his bed(an extra large coffin with nice thick
pillows and blankets) and rolls towards the beeping clock,
one eye opens and he lifts his head drool clings to the
pillow. He knocks the clock off and slides out of bed, he
slips his feet into a fluffy pair of slippers and shuffles
into a dirty grubby dressing gown, picking a half full
bottle of blood from the knights other hand he takes a sip,
then he navigates the messy bedroom and out the door.
INT.GOTHIC MANSION HALLWAY-CONTINUED
Vamp rubs his eyes tiredly as he walks down the hall towards
the bathroom, the hall is hugely long with chandeliers
hanging and suits of Armour all along the sides, some of the
Armour suits are placed in silly sexual poses and some have
been dressed in womens clothing, broken vases and mess
clutters the place. Vamp steps over a pile of comic books at
the door to the bathroom.
INT.GOTHIC MANSION BATHROOM-SUNSET
Vamp stands in the grimy bathroom in front of a large gilded
mirror, he looks at himself and dose not like what he sees,
he pokes at his slightly flabby belly and flexes his
biceps..not much muscle to speak of. He sighs and leans
close to the mirror and checks the bags under his eyes
shaking his head he takes a toothbrush out and scrubs his
teeth and fangs, the only clean and well kept part of his
body.
2.
INT.GOTHIC MANSION STUDY-SUNSET
Vamp enters a huge study, walking over to a computer in the
corner of the room, as he walks he passes through a shaft of
light and his skin starts to crisp and smoke, he walks over
angrily and pulls the heavy curtains closed. Slumping in his
chair he raises his bottle of blood to the huge portrait of
his father hanging above the fireplace.
VAMP
Morning Dad... good
evening...whatever.
Sipping blood as is computer dials a connection to the
internet he looks at his watch as it takes ages to connect,
grabbing the monitor in his hands he stares deeply into it
and his eyes cloud over, it connects. He laughs an evil
laugh and gulps down some blood he coughs and splutters
blood all over the monitor as it goes down wrong, catching
his breath he then wipes the blood off the screen with the
sleeve of his dressing gown adding more filth to the already
manky gown. Draining the end from his bottle he gets up and
walks over the the huge fireplace in the room, he steps in
and pushes a raised brick button in, the back of the fire
opens up to reveal a huge walk in fridge, he places the
empty bottle on a shelf and walks in to look for a full one,
sifting through loads of empty’s he starts to frantically
search to no avail, slumping he shakes his head in dismay.
As he walks out he sees some of the empty’s still have dregs
of blood in them, he picks these ones up and steps out to
the room again, placing all the bottles down he starts to
fill one up with all the dregs from the others. His fathers
portrait glaring over him almost looking like he was
disgusted at his son.
VAMP-(PRETENDING TO BE HIS FATHER)
Ohh how the young vampires of today
live...fat and lazy, no power or
elegance,not like in my day!
Vamp makes a face at his fathers picture and takes a gulp
from his now full bottle, scrunching his face up in disgust
at the cocktail of blood types, he flings it across the room
and scrapes his tongue clean on his sleeve. His stomach
rumbles hungrily. He walks over moodily to the window and
the sun has fully settled for the night, he looks down at
the town.
VAMP
Mehhh...not in the mood for the
hunt tonight...ill see if i can
lour some sap online.
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED: 3.
He sits back down at the computer and logs onto a date site,
he scrolls through the lists and clicks on a stunning
looking goth girl "looking for a mysterious handsome
stranger to whisk me off my feet and into the night". He
cracks a smile as he sees she is online, he starts a chat
with her.
Vamp- "well hello there, I see you are looking for a
mysterious handsome man...well i may be just what your
looking for...."
Goth Girl- "Think again you loser"
Vamp sits back from the computer confused, he scratches his
head.
Vamp-"what the hell...thats a bit harsh? you dont even know
me!"
Goth Girl- "take a look at the comments left on your profile
from other girls you tried to pick up"
He checks out his profile only to be met with a slew of
negative comments like "Profile picture didnt look anything
like him..what a creep!" and "Brought me back to his place,
looks like the place hadn’t been cleaned in years so i
slipped out when he wasn’t looking, speaking of clean...try
take a shower once in a while!" and "we went for pizza for a
date, he ate only the meat toppings from his pizza and left
the rest...weird!" and "met for a drink to meet in person,
im sure he was staring at my neck all night and he was
licking his lips all night...disgusting!"
He grunts, and goes to log off when an add pops up on the
sire, "local pizza delivery, $10 with any toppings, click
the add to order online now!" the add has a picture of a
stunning brunet delivery girl with long legs and heaving
breasts, Vamp jumps in his seat and clicks the add and
places an order. He closes his eyes and pictures the
delivery girl at the door, She holds the pizza in one hand
and pulls down the top of her shirt with the other to reveal
her neck.
PIZZA DELIVER GIRL(DREAM)
Special pizza delivery...with our
special sauce.
She closes her eyes turns her head to present her neck and
bites her lip. Vamp is rudely snapped back to reality as the
doorbell rings, he looks out the window and sees the pizza
car in the long driveway. He jumps from his chair and smells
his breath with his hand.
4.
INT.GOTHIC MANSION HALLWAY-CONTINUED
Vamp slicks back his hair and walks to the door. Opening the
door with a wide sweep and a large grin he sees the stunning
woman at the door his vision is cracked appart as the
"woman" choughs.
DELIVERY GUY
10 dollars...
the deliver guy hacks up a mouth full of phlegm and spits it
on the porch. Vamp stands there with his mouth hanging open
in shock, Delivery guy shoves his open hand into Vamps face.
He stumbles back and into the house shaking his head to
bring him out of his shock, he shoves his hands into his
pockets and pulls them inside out, shrugging his shoulders
and grins he then turns his attention to the delivery guy
and beckons him into the house.
VAMP
Come in for a moment wont you? I
seem to have mislaid my money.
Delivery guy mutters under his breath and enters the
hallway, looking around the magnificent house through milk
bottle thick glasses. Vamp walks him into the study and
signals him towards the big old leather couch. Vamp walks
over and starts to rummage through some drawers of a cabinet
with a sly grin on...all the drawers are totally empty.
VAMP
Hmm...i know i left it here
some...CUT OFF
Vamp is cut off as he turns from the cabinet and the
delivery guy is right up in his face, vamp stumbles back in
fright.
DELIVERY GUY
10 dollars....
Vamp laughs un easily then bears his teeth and trys to
hypnotize the delivery guy, his eyes glaze over white and he
stares deeply at the delivery guy...the thick glasses bounce
the hypnotic stare right back to the vamp and he becomes
light headed.
DELIVERY GUY
10 dollars....
Vamp pushes past him and looks around the other pieces of
furniture in the room all the while the delivery guy follows
him around muttering "10 dollars" vamp tries in vain to use
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED: 5.
his vampire stair every time the glasses reflect the effect.
Vamp is huffing and puffing with exertion, his pale face now
red with effort.
VAMP (OUT OF BREATH)
Maybe you could give me a hand and
look down the side of the couch
over there...im sure thats where i
was sitting last time i had it...
Delivery guy walks over and starts to lift the plush cusions
of the couch, as he dose Vamp picks up the fire poker from
the fireplace and tip toes over to the Delivery Guy, he
raises the poker and takes aim bearing his fangs and hissing
just about the bring the poker down on the head of the
delivery guy, who just in that moment picks up the last
cushion to reveal a crumpled up 10 dollar bill.
DELIVERY GUY
10 dollars...
he shoves the pizza into Vamps stumock who drops the poker
and retracts his teeth with a hiss of air as he tries to get
his breath back. Delivery Guy waddles out of the room
slamming the door behind him, the car screeches off down the
driveway.
Vamp is left sitting on the couch looking dumbfounded and
defeated. his stomach rumbles hungrily and he glumly looks
at the pizza.
end.
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...but you could ZIP the file and upload the resulting archive... ;)opentarget wrote:i cant upload a pdf....
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not a bad ideaHirazi Blue wrote:...but you could ZIP the file and upload the resulting archive..
heres the zip if youd like to read it offline and with better layout.
let us know what yous think!!
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any opinions people? come on now its for the commuinty so join in....or ill send Vamp after ye!!
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Well, first of all - as a rule of thumb: those who are silent, do not disagree... ;)
I like it, although I foresee problems if the part behind the computer draws out too long...
I like it, although I foresee problems if the part behind the computer draws out too long...
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So if I'm reading the script correctly, we've decided to actually have dialogue?
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well yes there is dialogue at the moment, if we can cut it out in future revisions of the screenplay all well and good.
dose anybody have issues with dialogue in this piece? if so(apart from getting actors) what kind of issues do you forsee?
dose anybody have issues with dialogue in this piece? if so(apart from getting actors) what kind of issues do you forsee?
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Well dialogue poses its own set of challenges, obviously.
Might be interesting (but IMHO not necessary, mind you) to rewrite the script so that it doesn't need any dialogue,
but that in itself might be undoable/impractical...
So maybe a little dialogue is okay. ;)
Might be interesting (but IMHO not necessary, mind you) to rewrite the script so that it doesn't need any dialogue,
but that in itself might be undoable/impractical...
So maybe a little dialogue is okay. ;)
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